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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion. t Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

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There are two opposite views about home school among people.
Someone
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believes
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believe
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 that attempting school
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children
 is better for their social improvement,
whereas
 others think that studying at home enables students to deeply understand the given material.
This
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advantages
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the advantages
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 of both sides and provide personal
opinion
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opinions
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. On the one hand,
school
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the school
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 provides a structured environment where
children
 interact with peers regularly. So,
this
 exposure to diverse social situations helps them develop essential social skills.
For instance
, during group projects or recess,
children
 learn how to cooperate, share, and resolve conflicts.
This
 interaction is vital for their future success in personal and professional relationships.
On the other hand
, studying at home allows students to set their own pace for learning.
Therefore
, they can spend more time on topics that they find challenging and move quickly through material they understand well.
For example
, if a student struggles with algebra but excels in literature, they can allocate more time to algebra without feeling rushed, ultimately leading to a deeper understanding of the subject. In my opinion, socializing skills are more crucial for
children
 as a future part of
modern
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 community.
Therefore
, they should learn how to
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a
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talk with others and solve possible conflicts.
As a result
, in
future
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 we can get
more
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a more
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 stable society. In conclusion,
although
 distance learning gives
opportunity
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the opportunity
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 to study at
students
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 own speed, schools can provide interaction with the public.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • homeschooling
  • traditional schooling
  • development
  • individualized education
  • flexibility
  • scheduling
  • one-on-one attention
  • learning style
  • pace
  • safe and controlled learning environment
  • practical learning
  • negative influences
  • socialization
  • teamwork skills
  • diverse perspectives
  • independence
  • time management
  • qualified teachers
  • specialized resources
  • extracurricular activities
  • sense of community
  • hybrid approach
  • personality
  • striking a balance
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