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The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.

The chart below shows information about different species of birds observed in Woodchuck county at different times of the year.
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The table demonstrates the seasonal observation of distinct
type
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types
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 of birds in Woodchunck country.
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,
it is clear that
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while
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 Crows, Cardinals and Woodpeckers were seen both in winter and summer, Juncos
was
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were
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 solely visible in the winter times.
To begin
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 with, it is noticeable that just three
kind
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kinds
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 of birds have existed in Woodchunk, namely, Crows, Cardinals and Woodpeckers.
On the other hand
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, Juncos species had been seen in the country only in
winters
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winter
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.
Moreover
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, based on the precise observation, the four rest
species
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of species
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( Vireos,
Oriloles
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Orioles
, Mockingbirds ,and
Blue birds
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Bluebirds
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)
was
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were
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 only visible during summer.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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