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The graphic indicates the changes in the amount of people in millions used three important airports in NewYork in the six successively year leading upto the 2000 year.

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The graphic indicates the changes in the
amount
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 of people in millions
used
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who used
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 three important airports in NewYork in the six
successively
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year
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years
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 leading
upto
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up to
 the 2000
year
. LaGuardia was the most used
airport
 in
the
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apply
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5 of the 6 years and the
number
 of
visitors
 steadily
increase
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increased
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 throughout
this
 period, at the same time the
newark
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Newark
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 attracted the fewest
number
 of
visitors
 in 4 of the 6 years.
According to
 the data more than 25 million people used Kennedy
Airport
in1995
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in 1995
, and 35 million people used LaGuardia
AIrport
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Airport
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, and
this
year
AIrport
 had the highest
number
 of
travelers
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travellers
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. Newark
AIr
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Air
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 carried about 15 million passengers
this
year
, the lowest among the three airports listed. AFTER 1
YEAR
, the
number
 of
visitors
 at all three airports has increased, and their popularity and passenger dynamics remained almost the same as in the
orevious
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previous
year
. Kennedy
Airport
 had the largest
number
 of passengers in
the
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1997,
however
, LaGuardia managed to accommodate the highest
number
 of air
visitors
 in the next 3 years.|
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