Some people claim that immigrants should adopt the local culture when immigrating to a new country. While others think that they can establish a minority community instead. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays, migrating to another
country
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is becoming more common.
However
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, there are conflicting views on which
culture
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should travellers
intregrate
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integrate
. A few communities believe that it should be the local
culture
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,
while
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others view that migrants should introduce a cultural
group
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instead
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.
This
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essay will discuss both ways of thinking
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and my personal view. Learning the traditional values of a new
country
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is beneficial to individuals
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since it provides awareness to immigrants on why citizens behave the way they do.
For example
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, if an Asian
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to a European
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, they can experience a
culture
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shock, as Europeans can be more direct.
Moreover
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, adjusting to a new
country
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's
culture
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shows someone's strong respect
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the place that immigrants choose to live in.
Therefore
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, advocating for newcomers to learn the local
culture
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is essential.
On the other hand
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, establishing a minority community may have
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a positive
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effect
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newcomers.
First,
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cultural
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the cultural
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group
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allows each community to keep their values intact. Since they move to a different
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, parents can introduce their
tradition
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traditions
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to their children and to the next generation.
Furthermore
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, the small
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can provide support to individuals
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recently migrated to the
country
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by allowing them to build a network.
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, having a minority
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can come
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for both locals and newcomers.
To conclude
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, there are conflicting views on which
culture
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immigrant
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immigrants
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should practice. Both views have positive effects
to
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the community. In my opinion, immigrants should learn the
culture
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of the
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they
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to, but should still be given the right to keep their
tradition
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traditions
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adopt the local culture
  • integrate
  • social customs
  • mutual respect
  • cultural clashes
  • minority community
  • cultural diversity
  • emotional support
  • mental health
  • multicultural society
  • harmonious coexistence
  • heritage
  • social acceptance
  • cultural practices
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