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In the past , when students did a university degree they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantah5 and disadvantages of this development

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In the earlier time, students used to complete their degree in their own
nation
, but recently the trend to
study
 in different nations has raised. It has both
side
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 which can be beneficial and harmful,
this
 essay will discuss both
the
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side
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 where
merits
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 outweigh the demerits.
The access
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 to
study
 abroad opens new doors for students. Despite the unavailability of
education
 facilities in their
nation
in particular
 fields, they can still pursue their dream and achieve the degree in the
field
 they desire
field
 from
the
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foreign
countries
.
For instance
,
education
 in the
field
 of Aerospace in Nepal started about 4 or 5 years ago but even before that time era, Nepalese could
study
 aerospace in other
countries
 namely the USA,
china
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, India and so on.
As a result
, they earned a degree in their
field
 of interest and few have returned to establish that
field
 in their own
nation
.
On the other hand
, the
countries
 are losing their skilled manpower. The best and most qualified students have been leaving their homeland to
study
 in foreign
countries
. During the period of their
study
, they make connections with different industrial personalities and get involved in work after completing their courses. They get used to the environment and facilities provided, showing
reluctant
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 to return
their
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 own motherland and settle there.
For example
,
according to
 a recent survey, approximately only 20% of
total
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 people
that
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 goes abroad for higher
education
 returns
back
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as a result
 many part of the Canada and USA
such
 as Texas are occupied by people from other
counties
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. Lossing
such
 an educated personality is a huge loss for the
nation
 hampering its
overall
 development. In conclusion, the both negative and positive aspect of the opportunity to
study
aboard
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 has been discussed. In my opinion, every individual should have the right to
education
 and that right should not be restricted because of their nationality.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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