The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In
this
current time, technology based on
science
should
has
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a purpose to improve
people
’s
lives
. I agree with
this
statement because the function of
science
is to make
quality
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of
human’s
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life
become better. In
this
essay, I will explain my reasons in the following paragraphs.
To begin
with, there were some scientists who made an invention
such
as
telephone
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, lamp, and other things that help
people
in their daily activities. Without their invention,
people
may never experience the ease of things they have right now.
For instance
, Alexander Graham Bell who invented
telephone
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made a change from the traditional method of communication until
people
can
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use
telephone
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to communicate.
Moreover
, in
this
era,
people
even use
smartphone
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smartphones
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as a form of technological development and it
became
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become
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one of the most important items for
people
which has several benefits to their
life
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.
Furthermore
, the development of
science
can make our
lives
more convenient
such
as in
health
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the health
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sector. It has
significant
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a significant
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role
that
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can
help
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people
to get a better
life
related to their health and quality of
life
. As we know, there are several methods to maintain
healthy
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life
and
also
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multivitamins that
people
can consume to take care of their body. These multivitamins contain some ingredients which have a good impact
to
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our health based on
science
.
To sum up
, the ease of
human’s
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lives
depends on
science
which hopefully will have many developments in the future.
Although
there
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is still possible that
science
can cause
harms
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harm
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to
people
’s
lives
, it can be directed by
government
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the government
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to focus more on
contribute
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contributing
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to
reach
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a better
life
for
human
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humans
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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