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There is a moral necessity today for the richer countries of the world to help the poorer countries develop in terms of feeding the population, education and health care. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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One of the widely discussed topic issues nowadays is that an ethical demand today for the prosperous states of the world to aid the unfortunate
countries
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 evolve in terms of feeding the people, enlightenment and medical aid. Now people are
begging
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 to realise that the situation of poor
countries
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 is getting worse without
helping
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the help
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 of developed
countries
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. Personally, I tend to think that
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supporting
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impoverished
nations
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 is a moral obligation of rich
countries
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.
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, it is well known that whole republics are interlinked with each other in economic
way
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ways
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. One of the main reasons behind
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 the deficiency in one country will influence other
nations
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. A good case in point is a bread becoming more expensive in Central Asian
nations
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 because of the high price of flour in Kazakhstan.
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, other
countries
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 should help by lowering the price of certain goods which are affecting
dear
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 rate of food.
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, it can
also
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 be argued that the conception of humanity
have
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 to play a general role in the politics of
countries
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.
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 to say that by giving an opportunity, many teenagers
of
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 poor
countries
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 are
accepting
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accepted
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to
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into
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 the universities of rich
countries
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 and, in the end, they devote their knowledge to the flourishing of their
countries
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. Take
for example
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 people from poor African
countries
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have
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who have
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 been studying in European
countries
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 and gaining more chances to better their lives. In conclusion, taking everything mentioned into account in our final analysis we can say that well-developed states should hurry up to give a hand to
needly
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nations
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 despite any kind of problems.
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, most of nowadays wealthy
countries
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 enriched themselves by exploiting currently unfortunate
nations
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 in history and it is a time to revise mistakes in the past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • moral necessity
  • global solidarity
  • affluent
  • food security
  • global stability
  • poverty reduction
  • global health standards
  • economic instability
  • inequality
  • non-intrusive
  • sovereignty
  • autonomy
  • self-reliance
  • sustainable development
  • international cooperation
  • transparent
  • accountable
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