Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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the retirement

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and examples. The first argument put forward for stance is that

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there should be different

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of retirement for different

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demand physical input and after a certain

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some workers with long years of service and excellent contribution to the job should be given

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early

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retirement

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that, the

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and equal for all

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so there is no difference in jobs and

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retirement age
unfair
pension
occupation
workers
physically demanding jobs
professions
stress
responsibility
long years of service
excellent contributions
eligibility
individual circumstances
case-by-case basis

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Some people think that having a set retirement age for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair. They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement?

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