The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.

The diagram below shows the production of olive oil.
The illustration below tells the
manufature
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manufacture
manufacturer
of olive
oil
. The production has seven separate steps with two main steps.
Firstly
, the farmers
picking
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up the
olive
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from the trees.
Then
, the
olive
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are brought the a chamber in order to
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rins them
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using cold water. In the next step, the olive enters another chamber by the belt,
this
is where the olive
being
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smashed. After that, the process has
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produce
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the olive
paste
and the
oil
stones.
Then
olive
paste
are
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pagkaged
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packaged
in to
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bags with holes on the outside. Moving on to the next step
where
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the olive
paste
being pressing
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using heat. After pressing it, the olive
paste
goes to another chamber to separate the
oil
out of the
the
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water.
Finally
, the
oil
are
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brought to the shop in order to
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and
sale
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sell
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.
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