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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humans. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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We live in a changing world,
besides
 progressive, modern, new things, that
also
 bring a lot of drawbacks to people, including new epidemics, and diseases.
Therefore
,
humans
 always
research
, develop, and test new medicines, and other products, and
animals
 are one of the experimental samples. Many people argue that these
experiments
 should be prohibited,
while
 others advocate them as they are useful for
humans
. I always believe that
research
 is extremely necessary, but we should find out a new sample to replace
animals
 in
experiments
. On the one hand, the fact that animal
research
 has many benefits for
humans
 in medical
research
 and other product testing.
This
research
 not only ensures human safety and survival but
also
 promotes human health.
For instance
, animal testing plays a crucial role in ensuring that drugs are safe for human use. By testing drugs on
animals
, researchers can determine their potential side effects and
overall
 safety before moving on to human trials.
This
 is an important step in protecting human health and ensuring the effectiveness of new treatments.
On the other hand
,
research
 deal with many problem in health human, but I strongly agree with the opinion that animal
experiments
 should be forbidden.
Although
 they are
animals
, they
also
 have the right to live and, the right to be free. We can not take away their rights.
This
research
 is morally wrong, and ruthlessly for
animals
. Why don’t we use another thing to replace
animals
 in
experiments
?
For example
, we can use cultured human cells on the “frame” of plastic chips, which is an efficient method called viscera on the chip. All in all,
research
 is essential to ensure that
humans
 can safely survive when we cope with many epidemics and diseases.
However
, animal
experiments
 are not a good method, they are so cruel. Government and competent authorities need to give many methods to restrict and ban
experiments
 on
animals
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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