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In some countries, it is possible for people to have a variety of food that has been transported from all over the world. Do you think its benefits outweigh the drawbacks?

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In some
countries
, it is now possible for people to buy a wide variety of
foods
 transported from all over the world. To what extent do the benefits of
this
 development outweigh the drawbacks?
To begin
 with, it is understandable that some believe transported
foods
 are a negative development
due to
 the effect on domestic
food
while
 citizens prefer
oversea
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overseas
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foods
 to domestic ones. The Vietnamese,
for instance
, prefer overseas
foods
, especially those from developed
countries
such
 as the US, Japan or Korea because people believe that
food
 from these
countries
have
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has
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 a better quality.
Thus
, the domestic
products
 could not be sold so the local farmers
have
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had
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 to discount their
products
 to compete with
oversea
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overseas
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foods
.
However
, it could be seen that the positives of
this
 development outweigh the drawbacks
while
 it supported developing
countries
on
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in
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 their agricultural
products
 and created a diversity of
food
 in meals . Most of the income in developing
countries
, especially agricultural
countries
,
come
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comes
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 from selling their
products
for
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to
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 developed
countries
. The SEA
countries
,
for example
, have
a
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apply
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good
condition
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conditions
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 to produce tropical fruit so they produce and sell it
for
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to
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 China, which could not produce enough for their citizens' needs.
Moreover
, transported
foods
 could bring a diversity of
foods
for
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to
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 the country. Take the Western
countries
 as an example, they could not grow tropical
foods
 like jackfruit,
mangosteem
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mangosteen
mangosteens
,
mango
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and mango
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 and
as a result
 transported
food
 is a solution which is clearly convenient and somehow extended their choices in
food
.
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Example:

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