You have just bought a new mobile phone from a website on the Internet. When it was delivered, the phone was faulty. Write a letter to the company. In the letter: introduce yourself; explain the situation; state what action you want to be taken.

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Dear Sir/Mam, I am Simrandeep Kaur and working as a senior editor in the Times of India my

phone

crashed

last

week and

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ordered a new

phone

from your website

last

week.

Firstly

, I am not fond of online shopping and it was the first time that I purchased something online. My

phone

arrived Yesterday by mail and I was too much excited about the

phone

. When I unwrapped the package I was shocked because it was not the same colour which I had ordered on the website.

Secondly

, It had some damage on the back of the device . I think your employee made a mistake in shipping the order.

Although

, I have sent an email to the general manager but he/she does not respond. I would be looking for quick action from the company

moreover

I want the new

phone

which I have ordered. Waiting for your response. Your faithfully.

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

5 paragraphs

153 words

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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

It is commonly said that today's children are facing huge challenges. This essay indent to discuss the causes of these pressures and give some suggestions to solve them.

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to the poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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