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Nowadays more and more people are using smartphones and computers to communicate, so they are losing the ability to communicate with each other face to face. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

#people #smartphones #computers #ability #face
Actually
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the
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apply
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technology
make
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makes
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 our life easier
then
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than
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befor
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before
 so l agree with communication by phone or any
technology
 thing .
Overall
 , you can make a call from
elsewhere
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you
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apply
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use
you
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your
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 phone to call someone even when they
was
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are
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 so far that on of
crucial
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the crucial
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thing
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things
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 is substantial in our life and when you want to play video games with your friends it is very easy to play even when you want to hung out with them that one of thing is very good . Can l compare with someone
lives
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 in
city
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the city
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 and someone
lives
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who lives
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 in
countryside
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the countryside
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 or rural people it is
diffiucalt
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difficult
 to compare
between
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apply
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them because first one he has a
technology
biger
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bigger
 than
csoned
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the csoned
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 so , l agree with
technology
 make our life
easily
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easier
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then
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than
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 in
a
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the
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 past . Eventually , right now one of
substantial
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the substantial
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thing
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things
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 is
technology
 so we cannot live without
technology
 it is
extreme
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extremely
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 difficult .
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