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Car ownership has increased so rapidly over the past thirty years that in many cities aroud the world there are constant traffic jams. How true do you think the statement is? What measures can governments take to discourage people from owning cars?

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It is true that nowadays in many big cities, there are regular
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 jams, which may be caused by the dramatically increased number of
car
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 owners. Personally, I believe that there are some steps that governments can take to prevent
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 problem caused by
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usage. In my opinion, the large number of cars on the roads is the main cause of
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 jams, which occur because of the affordability of the vehicles. In the modern society with developed technologies even a low-income individual can afford to purchase a
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, just maybe not as fancy as it could be.
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, I consider that increasing the taxes and other regulations on
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 ownership by the government is a great solution to the high
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 problem. It can help to decrease the demand for cars in the economy, freeing the streets from large numbers of vehicles.
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, people can
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 public
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 or more eco-friendly options
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 as bicycles.
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, public
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 can be not as convenient and cheap in some towns,
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 one may prefer to
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 their own personal
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,
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 of sharing it with other people, creating
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 jams.
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, the government can
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this
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 opportunity to develop the public
transport
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 system and make it more affordable, decreasing people’s wish to
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 a
car
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. If it is cheaper and faster to reach the wanted destination than using a personal vehicle, the demand for travelling with cars will immediately drop, especially for those with low income. Taking everything into consideration, various measures,
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 as increasing the taxes on
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 ownership and developing the public
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 system, should be taken by governments to solve the high
traffic
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 problem.
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