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The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

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The table illustrates percentage-wise data of around 7000 Scottish aged 16 to 74, for their participation in varying cultural activities
such
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 as writing, visual arts and computer-based among others.
Overall
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, any performances including dancing, singing or acting were enjoyed across the age groups at an average of 22%,
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 computer-based activities were the least preferred choice by all at a 6% average.
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, the young-age
group
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 witnessed the highest number of percentages in comparison to the older groups.
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 performances, the next highest activity was visual arts with 30% and
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 followed by writing at 17%. The remaining tasks scored the lowest at 11% and 10%, respectively.
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, the
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group
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 preferred performances the most at 22% and liked cultural purchases and crafts next at 17% each.
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, only 16% of
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group
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 voted for visual arts, which is half of what the teenagers voted for.
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, the old-age
group
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 opted for undertaking crafts at 22%; the highest value for
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 category in comparison to others. The same applies to the cultural purchases at 18%.
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, writing and computer-based activities scored the lowest with
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group
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 at 5% each.

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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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