The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.

The Table below shows the results of a survey that asked 6800 Scottish adults (aged 16 years and over) whether they had taken part in different cultural activities in the past 12 months.
The table illustrates percentage-wise data of around 7000 Scottish aged 16 to 74, for their participation in varying cultural activities
such
as writing, visual arts and computer-based among others.
Overall
, any performances including dancing, singing or acting were enjoyed across the age groups at an average of 22%,
whereas
computer-based activities were the least preferred choice by all at a 6% average.
Firstly
, the young-age
group
witnessed the highest number of percentages in comparison to the older groups.
Besides
performances, the next highest activity was visual arts with 30% and
then
followed by writing at 17%. The remaining tasks scored the lowest at 11% and 10%, respectively.
Secondly
, the
middle-age
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group
also
preferred performances the most at 22% and liked cultural purchases and crafts next at 17% each.
In contrast
, only 16% of
this
group
voted for visual arts, which is half of what the teenagers voted for.
Thirdly
, the old-age
group
opted for undertaking crafts at 22%; the highest value for
this
category in comparison to others. The same applies to the cultural purchases at 18%.
Similarly
, writing and computer-based activities scored the lowest with
this
group
at 5% each.
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