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Some young people go to college or university to have a successful career path. Others, however, chose to go straight to work to gain real life experience after high school. Discuss both views and write your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

It is debatable that some
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 prefer to go to college or
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 for higher
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 after passing
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school,
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 other wishes to explore more partial scenarios by joining organizations or small-scale business. Both aspects have their own perspective and value advantages as per requirements. In
this
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 essay, I will explain both views with relevant examples and share my opinion. On the one hand, a few sets of individuals want to enhance their
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 and explore more about specialized fields that are required for their success in the long run.
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 they prefer higher
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 from reputed universities and educational
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 for their career development.
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, many medical
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 require extensive
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 for specialization
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 as neurology, psychology,
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, etc,
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 higher
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 are required for career building
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 these fields. In
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 circumstances, it is necessary for youngsters to undergo higher
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 from college.
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, some individuals prefer to perform jobs after passing school as they want more practical experience to gain more organizational skills from on-the-job training programs
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 of studying at colleges.
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, some jobs do not require technical
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therefore
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 it is not necessary to invest more in higher
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 from big
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.
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, basic entry-level jobs in many organizations do not require more expertise and
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 it is advisable for some
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 to gain experience and learn from the working environment.
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 helps
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 to gain interpersonal and organizational skills which are not sometimes possible to learn from
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, studying at colleges or big
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 is necessary for higher
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 in specialized fields.
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, gaining practical exposure is
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 necessary to explore more skill sets which will help in the long run. I believe that careful consideration should be taken as per the requirement of
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, if they want to build careers in a specific field that require more
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then
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 they should opt for higher
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otherwise
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, individuals can opt for direct work after passing school.

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Provide more specific and relevant examples to support your points.
lexical resource
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grammatical range
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