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Nowadays families are not as close as they used to be. What do you think are the causes of this? What can be done to make families closer?

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In
this
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 globalisation era, there are so many
families
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 who tend to spend their lives for livelihood rather than engage with their family members. In my perspective, there are two reasons for
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 phenomenon, which are workaholic and
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 management.
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 with, it is undeniable that there is so much professional
work
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 that consumes more
time
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. In
this
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 digitalisation era,
people
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 are getting easy to do their
work
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 at
home
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 by utilising an internet connection.
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 the reason why, humankind nowadays is still busy even when they have arrived
home
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 but still do their assignments.
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, a workaholic father has finished his
work
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 hours and going back to his
home
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. Right after he arrives, he continues the tasks that are not completed yet in his house rather than spending
time
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 with his wife and children.
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,
time
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 management is another factor that has become a barrier for
families
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 to get closer to each other. It is commonly believed that every family have a special
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 when they are required to gather together for some occasions
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 as birthday party, wedding party, and Christmas day.
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, some
people
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 are not able to manage their
time
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 to visit their family in a particular event.
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, a student who studies overseas at a different
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 to their hometown will find it hard to allocate his/her
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 for family special events which is expected to strengthen family bonding. In conclusion, it is obvious that
people
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 nowadays find it hard to distinguish their professional and personal lives. They are likely to mix their
work
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 and family errands.
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, more and more
people
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 become workaholics and at the same
time
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 neglect the bonding of their
families
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.
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, it can be avoided by respecting each family member and allocating
time
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 to build close relations between
families
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 at
home
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.
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