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Write a letter you facing some problem in your rented home and you should give the Soultion.

Dear sir, I am writing to inform you of the issues we
are
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have been
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 having in our
just rent
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rented
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 apartment since 2020.
i
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I
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 work as a nurse in
hospital
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the hospital
a hospital
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 and
i
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I
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 arrange some
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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 the following days,
which
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apply
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for a courteous home atmosphere. As
you
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you are
you were
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 aware the weather in the city
quite
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is quite
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 hot. The weather is making it hard to line without
air
Correct article usage
an air
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 conditioner
beacouse
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because
 the high temperature
smother
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smothers
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 the inside environment.
Furthermore
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,
i
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I
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also
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 want to raise a few issues about the shared kitchen and
bathroom
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. The kitchen and
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bathroom's
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bathroom
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 floor tiles are slick, making it quite difficult to walk on these surfaces without
floorwear
Correct your spelling
footwear
floor wear
. My mother stumbled and broke her arm bone
last
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weak
Correct your spelling
week
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 in the
bathroom
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. I request you to please install a new split air conditioner in the bedroom
beacouse
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because
 as you are probably aware, window air
conditioner
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conditioners
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 do not reduce temperature. The floor tiles in the kitchen and
bathroom
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 should
also
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 be changed because they pose obstacles to easy walking. I hope to hear from you shortly. Yours faithfully, Xyz.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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