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In some countries more and more people are becoming interested in finding out bout the history of the house or building they live in.

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More
people
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 are becoming
curios
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curious
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 about the background story of the house or building they live in. It happens in some countries, especially in countries
who
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that
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 have several histories and their
people
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 have more concerns about it. In
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 essay, I will share my thoughts about
this
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 phenomenon.
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, in my opinion, some reasons for the searching of
history
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 are
people
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 tend to believe that what happened several years ago has an impact on their current condition related to magic things that
people
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 believe.
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, sometimes
people
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 simply want to know about the building they live in to know more about the past.
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, my cousin who lives in
urban
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an urban
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 area wondering about the
history
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 of the apartment she lives in because she wants to know why the price is cheaper than the other apartments near hers.
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, to make it clear,
people
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 can research the background story from online sources. If the building they live in is a familiar or well-known building, there will be a probability
to
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 finding the
history
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 on the internet.
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,
people
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 can ask their neighbours who have lived longer in their area because sometimes old
people
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 like to share anything about the past. Another source that can be a consideration is
people
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 can gather information from management
building
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buildings
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 in an apartment. They usually know and welcome the residents to ask anything. In conclusion, the past still has an effect on current life because it is something that can not be separated. It makes
people
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 curious
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apply
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about the
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 and they can use several sources to find it.
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