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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The three charts below show the value in Australian dollars of Australian trade with three different countries from 2004 to 2009. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below. You should write at least 150 words.
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The graph charts illustrate bilateral export-import transactions between
Australia
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 and the major partners, namely
China
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, the USA, and Japan, measured in Australian
Dollars
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. The data reveals distinct patterns in trade volume from 2004 to 2009.
Firstly
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,
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Australia’s
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 trade relationship with
China
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 showed significant growth during
this
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 period. In 2004, Australian export goods to
China
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 accounted for approximately 10-12
billion
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Dollars
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, steadily increasing over the years. By 2008,
Australia
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 successfully managed to surpass the imported goods,
thus
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 accounting for a surplus until 2009.
This
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 monumental shift positioned
China
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 as
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Australia’s
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 key partner. Meanwhile, Japan remained a consistent and
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Australia’s
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 valuable export destination. Despite a contraction in 2008,
Australia
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 continued to receive around 10
billion
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Dollars
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, highlighting a stable and healthy economic mutualism.
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,
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Australia’s
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 transactions with the United States followed a different trend. Over the five years,
Australia
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 imported more than 20
billion
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Dollars
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 worth of products, as opposed to 10
billion
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Dollars
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 of exported goods.
This
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 data highlighted significant reliance upon United States deliverance, as evidenced
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 deficit trading calculation.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words australia, china, dollars, australia’s, billion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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