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Nowadays governments are investing more in public transport such as buses and trains rather than in building new roads. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages

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this
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 age, decision-makers are spending more money to develop public
transportation
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 means rather than constructing new routes. I am of the belief that developing public commuting means
have
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 a positive impact on the environment compared to private vehicles. On one hand, building new paths plays a pivotal role in mitigating the traffic congestion issue.
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, many individuals suffer from
lacking
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in
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 infrastructure
such
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 as
roads
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that
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 makes them
wasting
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 their time on
roads
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.
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, in Iraq, there are around two
thousands
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 motor vehicles
enter
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 the country annually,
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 the available highways have not been changed
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 ten years .
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 example shows that the number of private commuting means is not directly proportional to the number of available routes,
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,
this
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 leads to
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 of a huge number of cars
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,particularly, few
roads
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 which, in turn, causes traffic
jam
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.
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, building new highways can have an indispensable impact on treating the traffic problem.
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, activating public
transportation
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 systems plays an important role in decreasing air pollution levels. To illustrate, the prime culprit of polluted air is exhaust fumes , which
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 been surging in the past few years because most people depend on private
transportation
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 means
instead
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 of using the public commuting network.
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, several
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 illnesses have emerged
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 as lung cancer and other respiratory diseases.
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 can exemplified by an article conducted by a group of Iraq researchers that showed the death rate due
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 cancer is gradually increasing mainly because of vehicle fumes. What can be said here is that investing more money to enhance and develop the public
transportation
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 system can significantly improve the environment ,
as well as
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, decrease the pollution levels. In conclusion,
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this
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 essay has reiterated the above-mentioned ideas, I assume that allocating money for improving
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public transit
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 of building new
roads
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 can save many lives, and will mitigate the problem of air pollution.
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