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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates how households in a country divided their weekly budget into several basic expenses from 1968 to 2018.
Overall
, money spent on food
exhibited
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 the most significant spending item in 1968 which
replaced
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 as first rank by spare time activities
after
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50 years later. The vast majority of
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the increase
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increase
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experienced
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 by the category of housing, transport, and free time activities. Housing nearly doubled its proportion from 10% to just below %20 of weekly income.
In addition
, transportation spending
also
 saw a likely increase but reached
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roughly 15% in 2018. Ultimately, the ratio of leisure activities expanded its size from about 10% to more than 20% between 1968 and 2018. The remaining areas demonstrated a noticeable drop throughout the period, except household goods. Its ratio stayed constant at below 10%. In 1968, the food expenditure of a household
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 one-third of the total income.
On the other hand
, it dramatically
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 to approximately 17%. The remaining items
such
 as energy, personal expenses or garments experienced a downward trend. Their proportions decreased by 5-1% in the period of 50 years.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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