45.In most countries, prison is an effective solution for the problem of crime. Some people think a more effective solution is to provide a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that in most nations, jail is the way that they use for solving a trouble of crime and is stated that it would be more effective by offering a better education.

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essay completely agrees with

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statement because they can be taught the right things and

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can get out of

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after a certain time. Individuals should be taught from little the right and wrong things.

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is because kids do not really know what things can be done and what not, if nobody corrects them,

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they will continue doing it and it will be more difficult to change their habits when they get older. Normally,

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start committing

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when they are aged 13 to 18 and since

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around them do the same thing, they will think that what they are doing is very enjoyable but won’t think

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incorrect, causing that in the future they will carry out bigger faults. Recent research concluded that 95% of thieves caught in Spain admitted that they have been stealing since they were kids and discovered that when they grew up they could not stop. Depending on the type of crime that

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perform, the time that they need to be in jail is different, some are longer than others. But

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cannot solve the problem, because they don’t really care about what they have done incorrectly, so after getting out of

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, they will continue doing

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, the only thing that they might have changed is to be more careful with the police, trying to avoid them, and

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will be a cycle; they steal something, they will be caught by the police and they enter to

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they are released and continue performing

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, caught again.

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, it has been shown that in the United States freed criminals are often recaptured. In conclusion, allowing

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to know what is the correct and incorrect thing will allow a reduction in

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committed, I,

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, believe that giving a better education will solve more effectively crime problems than making

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stay in

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45.In most countries, prison is an effective solution for the problem of crime. Some people think a more effective solution is to provide a better education. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Your opinion

Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this became a positive or negative development?

In many countries, people increasingly talk about money (How much they earn or how much they paid for things in their daily conversations). Why is this? Is it a positive or negative development?

Some people think that the government should provide free public libraries in every town, while others think that this is a waste of money because people can access to information on the Internet. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

TD: Some modern artists receive huge sums of money for the things they create, while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?