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Write about the following topic: Some people think that the amount of noise one makes should be strictly controlled. Others believe one should be free to make as much noise as one wishes. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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Many individuals tend to support
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 opinion that some people create a
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 of
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 and it should be seriously regulated,
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 others think that
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 should be if a person wants
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 In my opinion, it should be controlled.
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 with, loud sounds can cause a
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 of inconveniences. As an example, people who work or study at home want to focus on their important chores,
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, they do not have an opportunity
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 these. They are distracted so they are becoming irritable. What is more, some individuals can have physical issues,
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, a headache
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. A
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 of babies strive to sleep in the afternoon but they cannot get a
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 dream so parents should make more efforts to calm their children.
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, loud sounds have a
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 of disadvantages.
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, many people consider that they can be free to make
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. If a person wants to listen to music loudly,
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, it is not prohibited because many governments created special
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 for doing
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.
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, it is normal to make
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 from 10 to 13 o'clock, to allow children to sleep, and from 14 to 23 o'clock.
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, individuals can do what they want. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
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 should be regulated because it interferes with others.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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