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Some school leavers choose to travel or work for a year before going to university. What might be the reasons for this? What are the disadvantages of this practice? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience. Write at least 250 words.

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There is an increasing number of undergraduates taking short breaks after high school completion. It is discussed that; few
students
 like to take a break for a year before enrolling in any
university
. During
this
 break, they spend that time
traveling
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 or working full-time. In my point of view, there are several
reasons
 and associated downsides with
this
 approach which will be discussed in
this
 essay. There are plenty of
reasons
 behind people taking a temporary break. One of them is to get financial stability for
university
 fees. Nowadays, the tuition fees are very expensive and the government scholarships to support education are very limited.
As a result
, some
students
 with low family income are forced to work full-time to save sufficient money for their college enrolment. Another reason is to get rid of
stress
 and anxiety caused by exam
pressure
. Not many
students
 can handle the test preparation
pressure
 and some
students
 like to take a break from their
studies
 and explore the world
instead
 by visiting natural scenery.
This
 helps them to reduce
stress
 and discomfort caused during high school
studies
.
Although
 the above
reasons
 are important depending on one’s situation, there are some downsides associated with
this
. The first of them is losing momentum from
studies
. There are lots of different topics taught in high school, that are implemented in the initial stage of
university
studies
.
Thus
, the
students
 who take
such
 breaks would find it hard to catch the old-school material and
as a result
, it increases the learning
pressure
 on them.
In addition
, it
also
 develops
stress
 and anxiety in them, as they tend to think of their high-school friends who will be one year ahead of them and graduating early from
university
.
To Conclude
, I think, financial
pressure
 and health discomfort are the two main
reasons
 for
students
 to take a year break.
However
,
this
 would make it tough for the
students
 in terms of initial learning and likely to develop preparation
stress
.
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