In some cultures, children are often told they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advanatages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

Hard work usually is the minimum requirement to achieve anything, but that
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the case. Life is complicated and there are many factors that
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contribute to our achievement, especially having
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. Obtaining a fortuitous chance in order to accomplish our goal is not something that would be under our control even if we have already
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it meticulously. We might
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our
children
to keep trying, but if the circumstances around him/her are not
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enough in order to reach that objective,
then
it would be pointless. The role of the parents in my opinion should be the one to open the path for the
children
by creating a possibility that could lead to a favorable situation. It could be anything from enrolling the said
children
to some courses or classes that could hone their
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or using the connection. The
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which
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and ethically unacceptable, but as long as the way to obtain the prospect is legal under the law,
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it should be fine. Good parents with excellent moral compass would certainly only choose the first option. If the said
children
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acquire his/her goal after hard work,
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it is up to their parents' intention whether to resort to the second option or simply
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the
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that it is time to give up. Whether the said
children
would give up or not in the end, as long as they already work hard,
then
the most important lesson that life is not always going
according to
our plan is already being learned
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