The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting and reportingthe main features, and make comparisions where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarize the information by selecting and reportingthe main features, and make comparisions where relevant.
The pie charts provide information on the average
peoportions
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proportions
proportion
in model meals of three nutrients
such
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as
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Sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
, all of which may
caused
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bad health if consumed a lot.
Callibration
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Calibration
of data is done in percentages.
Overall
,
Sodium
and saturated fat are high in typical dinner and added
sugar
are high in snacks.
To begin
with, all three nutrients are not less than 10% in each typical
meals
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meal
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.
Firstly
, considering model dinner,
Sodium
, saturated fat and added
sugar
are around
at
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43%, 37% and 23% respectively.
However
, these three nutrients in typical lunch
are fluctuated
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between
20%-30
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20% and 30
% and there are
quite
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considerable amount of
Sodium
and saturated fat
are
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in dinner and lunch which typically consume.
Then
, added
sugar
do
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not perform a magnificent variation and it is
glown
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grown
flown
between 14%-16% in typically.
Finally
, snacks contain 42% added
sugar
and
Sodium
and saturated fat in snacks are
at
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approximately half of the proportion
in
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its
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their
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added
sugar
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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