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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situations outweigh the disadvantages?

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Recently, the number of young
people
 has increased over the past few years in many nations.
While
 some
people
 believe that
this
 phenomenon is advantageous, I personally think that the negative impact is more serious. Many
people
 hold the view that having young adults is that the youth
play
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 a vital role
to boost
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 economic progression. They argue that young
people
 have new energy and perspective which can bring a different way of thinking to society.
Moreover
, most of them tend to
eager
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 to learn and build their experience so that they can apply their skill in the future.
This
 is why companies are likely to employ young adults because they have the ability to apply and understand different things quickly
and
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which is good
to boost
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 the productivity of a business.
On the other hand
/Having said that
,
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 there are some drawbacks to the unbalanced number of young and old
people
 related to experience in the workplace.
In other words
, young
people
 are generally inexperienced so they have to learn the skills from older workers
which
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 have earned more experience on the job.
For example
, a young professional who has started practising as a doctor does not have the same knowledge as an experienced doctor. When they encounter a medical case for the first time, they will have to consult
to
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older and more experienced doctors who have probably seen similar cases in the past.
This
 means that when there are
only
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fewer older
people
 from whom young adults can ask for advice related to certain problems, they will have difficulties finding the best solution. In conclusion, it seems to me that the drawback of having
to
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 many young
people
 surpasses the advantages. The young
people
 still need more older
people
 to assist them and to be role models,
otherwise
 they will have no one to guide them to be good
people
.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

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