It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
Some argue that
punishments
are crucial for helping children
distinguish between right and wrong. I somewhat disagree with this
as there are better teaching methods for youngsters. However
, there are two light-type punishments
that might be effective in certain situations, and educators and parents should be allowed to use them.
There are several reasons why, in my opinion, some punishments
might cause
more damage to good
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the good
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of
children
. The most important one is that aggression might cause
psychological issues on
them. Change preposition
for
This
is because kids do not understand why they are being punish
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are being punished
are punishing
for
as they usually get distorted assumptions regarding conflicts. Change preposition
apply
For example
, recent studies show that yelling at children
may cause
low-confidence issues, anxiety, and sadness. Moreover
, children
can learn best by knowing Correct article usage
the cause
cause
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causes
consequence
. Fix the agreement mistake
consequences
This
is due to
them understanding what happens once they spill their juice on the floor, and have to clean it afterwards, for example
.
However
, there are two types of punishments
that parents and educators should be permited
to do in certain situations. Correct your spelling
permitted
Firstly
, it might be useful to restrict toys and devices, such
as TV
or smartphones, to teach Fix the agreement mistake
TVs
children
to follow schedules. For instance
, when youngsters do not do their homework, parents should take their favourite toy away to show it is time to focus on studies
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their studies
Additionally
, telling kids to clean their disorder would also
teach them deal
with their actions. Add the particle
to deal
This
may help them understand how they are supposed to do things and not make the same mistakes again, as there might be consequences to it.
In conclusion, the reasons why I somewhat disagree with punishing children
are that it might cause
negative effects on their mental health and learning by cause
and consequence is often more effective. However
, there are some light-type punishments
that familiars and teachers should be allowed to do, such
as toy restrictions and making kids correct their mistakes whenever possible.Submitted by amandacflago23 on
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