The Annual graphs bar below illustrate the number of visitors using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000

The Annual graphs bar below illustrate the number of visitors using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000
The Annual graphs bar below illustrate the number of visitors using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000
Airport
traffic charts include traffic
date
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data
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from three airports named John
F.Kenedy
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F. Kennedy
Liguria and Newark . All
this
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graphs show growth.
Its
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notible
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notable
that LA Guardia loaded
airport
in 1995
remain
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first in 2000. Another fact
that
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Newark the unloaded
airport
in 1995
illustrate
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illustrates
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large
raise
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and almost
equaled
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with
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LaGuardia the second
one
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airport
.
Orange
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and Gray graphs the highest and lowest charts converge on a large
increase
between 1995 and 2000 the orange one from 35 to about 65. The gray graph
also
almost doubled
show
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a
unormous
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enormous
increase
from 15 to approximately 40
Last
but not
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of
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important is John F
Kennedy
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chart .
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graph is not like the others
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because
the others
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a gradual annual
increase
but
this
one
show
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fluctuations
although
in general it has
positive
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trend.
This
chart
increase
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from approximately 25 to around 45.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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