The pie chart below gives information on how people use four types of transport and the table provides of five reasons data of using a car in Edmonton.
The pie chart below gives information on how people
use
four types of transport and the table provides of
five reasons data of using a Change preposition
apply
car
in Edmonton.
As can be seen, in the pie chart the use
of four different types of transport vary
considerably. The Correct subject-verb agreement
varies
use
of car
constitute
just under Change the verb form
constitutes
one half
(45%). Belong to the Add a hyphen
one-half
use
of LRT (light rail transit) accounts for a little more than one-third (35%). However
, the pattern is the complete reverse when it comes to bus and taxi usage roughly ten per cent for each of them.
Approximately one half
(50%) of Add a hyphen
one-half
using
the Correct pronoun usage
those using
car
in city
Add an article
the city
a city
is
commute to work. For shopping and leisure activities are same is almost a small minority (15%). Taking children to school and business represent forty per cent and nearly a half (45%) respectively.
Unnecessary verb
apply
Overall
, the car
is the primary means of transportation for Edmonton’s citizens, the transit is popular
among them Correct quantifier usage
more popular
that
Correct word choice
than
bus
and Fix the agreement mistake
buses
taxi
.Fix the agreement mistake
taxis
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