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The given data presents us the type and reason for the transportation used in Edminton.

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The given data presents us
the
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 type and reason for the transportation used in
Edminton
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Edmonton
.
According to
 the diagrams, the car is most used by citizens of Edmond,
also
, work and business were
main
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 reasons
of
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for
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 using
transportations
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transportation
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. Categorically speaking, almost half of
travels
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travel
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were
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 made by car and Light Rail Transit.
While
 one out of ten of them prefer bus and same people taxi for their commuting. It is crystal clear to notice
topped
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 usage of cars to go to work and business needs with
ratio
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a ratio
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 of 40-45%.
In addition
, we
also
 see a high rating of taking children to school by Edmontonians. It is obvious that only
minority
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 of people use
transports
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transport
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 to go
to
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shopping and leisure activities which percentage is 15% each.
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