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The map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.

The map shows developments, which took place in the bookstore between 2000 and now.
The map shows the developments which took
place
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 in the bookstore since 2000. In 2000, the bookstore was a big shop of fictional
books
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 where the shelves were filled with them. But over a period,
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 experienced several dramatic changes. The most noticeable is that a lot of shelves of fictional
books
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 declined into a small area.
Moreover
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, the
place
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 of fictional
books
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 has been reduced by 4 times and now, in its former
place
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 are the
books
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 related to
the
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apply
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art, cooking and hobbies. The area of non-fictional
books
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 is increasing, which means that demand for them is growing.
Furthermore
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, a new cafe has taken the old
place
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 of non-fictional
books
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.
Subsequently
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, a little cafe
also
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 was placed on the old
place
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 of art, hobbies and cookery
books
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. The entrance, travel
books
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, new
books
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 and service desk have not been replaced and stayed at their original
place
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.
Overall
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, a comparison of the two maps reveals a change from a base to a balanced and modern bookshop.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words place, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • depicts
  • changes
  • occurred
  • transformations
  • developments
  • span
  • visual
  • comparison
  • illustrates
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