In some countries,owing a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be the case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

It is true that in some states,
pople
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people
prefer buying a home to renting
one
for a variety of reasons, and it seems to me a positive
situation
. There are several reasons that
people
in some parts of the world decide to buy a home and not rent
one
.
Firstly
, the economic
situation
in some
countries
is unstable and the renting prices
grow
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drastically, so
people
prefer to have their own
house
as soon as possible and not postpone it to
future
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because they are sure that in future buying a
house
is not affordable for them.
For instance
, nowadays,
people
in Iran can not pay for buying their own
house
because of these imaginary prices and even renting
one
is not possible for them.
Secondly
, rental fees are becoming more and more each year, so
people
know that soon they should look for a new smaller
house
with
reasonable
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price which is hard to find.
Finaly
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Finally
,
people
can
also
redecorate their own
house
whenever they want,
while
they can not make changes in a rental
house
without the owner's permission. I
imagin
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imagine
imagin'
that, in these
countries
with their unstable
situation
, buying a
house
is a kind of positive
situation
because it is an investment for
future
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.
For example
, by buying even a small land in
such
countries
, after a short period of time, its price
become
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more expensive than past and
people
can make a lot of financial profit. In conclusion, buying a
house
in some
countries
outweigh
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outweighs
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renting
one
for several factors,
So that
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so
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people
can benefit from
this
positive and favorable
situation
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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