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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Today it is a common belief that more and more planes have been used for delivery with
fruits
 and
vegetables
 to other nations where they rarely rise and don't fit with all weather. Increasingly
people
 think that it is a good deal whilst others opine opposite sides. From my perspective, I have mixed opinions and I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, most aircraft
used
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are used
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 for bringing
food
 from one country to another.
Moreover
, it
help
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 income grow higher than
last
 month.
For instance
, developed
countries
 export
vegetables
 and
fruits
 to poor
countries
. Because
people
 would prefer new
food
 from different
countries
 which they love to experiment with new flavours. Planes most have the highest speech and they are the most common way to transport because most
fruits
 and
vegetables
 have a short life since they were
harvest
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harvested
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, so they can delivered in good condition and have large storage to provide enough
food
. On the
second
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other
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 hand, when using too much
aircrafe
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air
 it
required
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requires
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 more money to use for delivery. Using them too much may cause lots of fumes and
increasing
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increase
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 air pollution and when
people
 need oxygen to breathe
while
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apply
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carbon dioxide accounts for the largest percentage in the atmosphere.
Moreover
, using too much may cause a waste of
goverment
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government
 money. The writer believes that
food
 will be exported by aeroplanes because
of
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people
 in tropical
countries
 want to make more relationships. In conclusion, the airline makes good transportation and conditions for
food
while
 some opine do not want imported
fruits
 and
vegetables
.

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