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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Today it is a common belief that more and more planes have been used for delivery with
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 to other nations where they rarely rise and don't fit with all weather. Increasingly
people
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 think that it is a good deal whilst others opine opposite sides. From my perspective, I have mixed opinions and I will discuss both sides. On the one hand, most aircraft
used
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are used
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 for bringing
food
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 from one country to another.
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, it
help
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 income grow higher than
last
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 month.
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, developed
countries
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 export
vegetables
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 and
fruits
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 to poor
countries
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. Because
people
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 would prefer new
food
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 from different
countries
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 which they love to experiment with new flavours. Planes most have the highest speech and they are the most common way to transport because most
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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 have a short life since they were
harvest
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, so they can delivered in good condition and have large storage to provide enough
food
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. On the
second
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other
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 hand, when using too much
aircrafe
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air
 it
required
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 more money to use for delivery. Using them too much may cause lots of fumes and
increasing
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increase
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 air pollution and when
people
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 need oxygen to breathe
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while
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carbon dioxide accounts for the largest percentage in the atmosphere.
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, using too much may cause a waste of
goverment
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government
 money. The writer believes that
food
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 will be exported by aeroplanes because
of
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apply
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people
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 in tropical
countries
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 want to make more relationships. In conclusion, the airline makes good transportation and conditions for
food
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while
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 some opine do not want imported
fruits
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 and
vegetables
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.
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