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Aircrafts have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays,
due to
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raise
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the
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 fruit and
vegetables
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vegetable
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 selling market, the government has been using
aircrafts
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aircraft
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 as an effective method to transport them to countries which is experiencing bad harvests.
This
 writer partly considers that
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 can significantly reduce the transporting hours and increase the contracts between institutions despite some
assume
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 that it is way too fuel-consuming. On the one hand, there is no doubt that more and more up-to-date
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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 have various functions and superb speed to move from one place to the other.
This
 is why they have been developed and used as a new method to transport fruits and
vegetables
fastly
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quickly
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.
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 the products can be transported
with
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 a high quantity within a short period of time. Take China as a realistic example, the government has invested in upgrading and using planes that
requires
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 a shortage of fuel but travel a very long route during its flight.
On the other hand
, the contracts may require
such
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a lot of
stuffs
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stuff
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 like better preservation machines inside the plane, or
the
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collaboration from two sides.
Furthermore
, it must be acknowledged that during the flight, the quality of fruits and
vegetables
 will be worsened and when it reaches the planned destination, the prices may go down a little bit. Take Australia as an example, the current surveys illustrate the analyses that the quality of products which are grown in the country is more delicious more than 50% than those
in
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abroad.
This
 writer believes that it is worth considering
this
 solution to gain more profits for the countries because of its advantages.
Moreover
, managers can easily deal with issues during the process in the transport system.
This
 may
also
 generate well-paid jobs and decrease the unemployment proportion. In conclusion, using helicopters to move fruits and
vegetables
 to other countries has two sides but it may be effective if a very short time is needed to complete the contracts.

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