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Aircraft have been increasingly used to transport fruits and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

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While
 some argue that aircraft have been used for transporting
food
 throughout the world isn’t
good
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 way for
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the area
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area
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areas
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 where some plants can’t be grown, I believe that
this
 is the best measure to provide
food
 for
hard
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the hard
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area
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. On the one hand, exporting
food
 outside will have many advantages for s.
Firstly
, it is necessary for
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residents
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resident
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residents
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 who
live
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 in a draconic area. In there, it occurred the state of lacking
of
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condition
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conditions
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 for planting crops.
For instance
,
some
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in some
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 areas of North Africa,
farmyard
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farmyards
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 have malnutrition so it is difficult to demand
for
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developing vegetables.
Thus
, supplying
food
 for them is a good way to help them.
Furthermore
, it
also
 solves the complex economic status.
In other words
, the good will not exist expressively in the inventory of big
warehouse
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warehouses
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 so that there doesn’t occur the inflation of
economy
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the economy
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.
On the other hand
, transporting
food
 to foreign countries will cause some problems. First of all, transporting fruits
to
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abroad
go
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with the price of
food
 will be
assess
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 highly.
Consequently
, it is difficult to consume all that inventory
on
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 the strange market.
For example
, some products are difficult to consume and sell because their tax prices are very high, making it impossible for consumers to buy them reasonably.
Moreover
, the cost of aircraft
transporting
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 is very expensive because of
cost
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the cost
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 of air transportation. In conclusion, importing fruits and vegetables from other countries can be beneficial as people get the chance to taste and eat different varieties of them.
However
, it is important to consider the increased cost involved in it.
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