Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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One of the positive impacts of a country's development is
people
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are able to buy the same
products
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anywhere in the world. I personally believe there is more positive development than negative development. First and foremost, countries are more developed nowadays than in the past.
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the way
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can be bought by
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.
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,
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limited to be sold in certain countries;
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, green tea
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only available in Japan. But today, we can find those
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nearby and easily. There are supporting factors to make it happen,
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as market chain and worldwide shipping. Another one is an online marketplace, which covers most areas in the world and distributes
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over
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the world.
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, when
people
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can find
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easily in the market,
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will lead to other drawbacks.
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for certain countries
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as Japan which have sushi as their typical food, it will lose its authenticity if that food can be found anywhere.
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there will be
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market competition, consumers tend to buy
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which have the lowest prices with
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good quality. It is undeniable that only a few buyers who might think about the originality of the
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,
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if it suits their budget, will straightly buy those
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. In conclusion, it is really beneficial for
people
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if they can buy the same
products
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anywhere. But as
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, we should restrict the
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which are available in the markets. As a consumer, we should buy
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by their originality
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of similarity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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