Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

One of the positive impacts of a country's development is
people
are able to buy the same
products
anywhere in the world. I personally believe there is more positive development than negative development. First and foremost, countries are more developed nowadays than in the past.
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phenomenon has an impact
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the way
products
can be bought by
people
.
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,
products
are
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limited to be sold in certain countries;
for instance
, green tea
products
are
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only available in Japan. But today, we can find those
products
nearby and easily. There are supporting factors to make it happen,
such
as market chain and worldwide shipping. Another one is an online marketplace, which covers most areas in the world and distributes
products
over
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the world.
Furthermore
, when
people
can find
products
easily in the market,
this
will lead to other drawbacks.
First,
for certain countries
such
as Japan which have sushi as their typical food, it will lose its authenticity if that food can be found anywhere.
Second,
there will be
a
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market competition, consumers tend to buy
products
which have the lowest prices with
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good quality. It is undeniable that only a few buyers who might think about the originality of the
products
,
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if it suits their budget, will straightly buy those
products
. In conclusion, it is really beneficial for
people
if they can buy the same
products
anywhere. But as
society
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, we should restrict the
products
which are available in the markets. As a consumer, we should buy
products
by their originality
instead
of similarity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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