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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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One of the positive impacts of a country's development is
people
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 are able to buy the same
products
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 anywhere in the world. I personally believe there is more positive development than negative development. First and foremost, countries are more developed nowadays than in the past.
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 phenomenon has an impact
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 the way
products
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 can be bought by
people
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.
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,
products
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 limited to be sold in certain countries;
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, green tea
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are
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 only available in Japan. But today, we can find those
products
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 nearby and easily. There are supporting factors to make it happen,
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 as market chain and worldwide shipping. Another one is an online marketplace, which covers most areas in the world and distributes
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over
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 the world.
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, when
people
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 can find
products
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 easily in the market,
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 will lead to other drawbacks.
First,
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for certain countries
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 as Japan which have sushi as their typical food, it will lose its authenticity if that food can be found anywhere.
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there will be
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market competition, consumers tend to buy
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 which have the lowest prices with
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good quality. It is undeniable that only a few buyers who might think about the originality of the
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,
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 if it suits their budget, will straightly buy those
products
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. In conclusion, it is really beneficial for
people
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 if they can buy the same
products
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 anywhere. But as
society
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, we should restrict the
products
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 which are available in the markets. As a consumer, we should buy
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 by their originality
instead
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 of similarity.

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coherence cohesion
Develop your ideas more in the introduction and conclusion to provide a clearer indication of your stance on the issue.
task achievement
Include more specific examples and analyze their impact in order to support your ideas effectively.
task achievement
Provide a more balanced discussion by acknowledging the potential negative impacts of countries becoming more similar.
lexical resource
Work on sentence structure and word choice to improve the clarity and precision of your ideas.
grammatical range accuracy
Pay attention to sentence structure and grammar to reduce errors and improve overall accuracy.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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