Social media helps people to keep in touch with friends and stay on top of news and events. Do you think the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages

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we can deny the transformation of globalisation that can pursue every generation

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older ages until young ages. A lot of new news around the world can be informed and up to date. In

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essay, I will explain the advantages and disadvantages.

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with, there are benefits of having social

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as keeping in close contact with precious family and friends.

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happened to me when I farewell with my best friend at junior high school, she was my neighbour at the same time became my lovely friend. Suddenly I found her Instagram account and we started to keep in touch again. The other interests are about the up-to-date fashion, technology, and news that we know through social

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. The most I loved about the online system was the fashion trend that always has something new, unique, and interesting.

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, there are always bad effects that can impact

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modern transformation era.

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, about the addiction to social

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, sometimes as a human we try to be perfect on social

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, like spending a lot of money in a restaurant just to post it on our Instagram or Twitter. But that was not our usual habit and activities, it is like we can be just ourselves.

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, hackers the dangerous in

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term, because hackers can steal our accounts on social

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or share bad content in our accounts. Even though, they can steal our money in e-commerce applications. To summarise, the positive sides of social

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can always improve day by day and can make people's lives easier and simpler,

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, it can have a negative impact on us like commanding our social

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geographical barriers
information hub
breaking news
educational content
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industry experts
community support
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data breaches
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mental wellbeing
social comparison
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