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In some places, old age is valued, while in other cultures youth is considered more important. Discuss both views and give your opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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There are some places where old age is more valuable,
whereas
 in other ones younger
people
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 viewed
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 significant. In my opinion, both ages play an important role.
To begin
 with, many senior
people
 should be respected by others because some of them have taken part in historical events.
For example
, a lot of grandmothers and grandfathers are veterans. They bravely passed through the Great Patriotic War and made a significant contribution to our existence. What is more, they have a
huge
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 experience and many of them transmit knowledge to youngsters.
Thus
, seniors contribute to our society.
Moreover
, a lot of elderly
people
 have many moral principles
due to
 their upbringing. Nowadays individuals
are
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lack
of
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kindness, honesty, loyalty, and politeness because of new standards.
On the other hand
, it is important to give respect
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 kids and adolescents. Children always have a wide imagination with lots of brilliant notions. Compared with adults, they are brave and they believe in magic and wonder. They
are not doubt
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that they have enough strength to reach their goals and dreams.
Besides
, youngsters are very versatile nowadays which means that they always try new things.
This
 quality really makes them an interesting person. Some
adolescent
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 strive to create new projects which facilitate the development of technologies,
for instance
. Many teenagers
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also
 take part in volunteer work doing their best to assist those in need. In conclusion, I firmly believe that
people
 of all ages are important because they make a lot of significant contributions to our world.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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  • esteemed
  • insights
  • embedded
  • seeking advice
  • prioritizing
  • premium on innovation
  • dynamism
  • adaptability
  • technological advancements
  • entrepreneurs
  • pioneers
  • indispensable
  • stability
  • harmonious
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