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In many countries schools have severe problems with student behaviour. What do you think are the causes of this? What solutions can you suggest?

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 who have misbehaviour issues in many countries. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons causing
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 problem, and how education can solve it. In my opinion, the widespread use of the internet has negative effects on student behaviour from different aspects.
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,
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 spend tons of time on social media and focus on interacting with others but not studying.
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, social media and webpages do not take responsibility for verifying content on their platform, leading
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 to learn inadequate information.
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, bad influencers spread sexual , violent, and substance abuse content,
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 may blindly follow their actions.
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,
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 may meet and hang out with strangers from social media and are encouraged to form inappropriate habits,
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 as smoking or doing drugs. I believe that educating
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 about the correct concept of the internet is the most effective way to solve
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 harsh problem. As long as
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 have abilities to discriminate adequate information, they can choose what to absorb wisely.
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, the government plays a critical role in cultivating
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' abilities via educational campaigns,
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 as school courses and student gatherings. With proper knowledge,
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 can distinguish inappropriate content and would not follow that
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.
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,
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 can tell the bullying video posted on Instagram is inadequate and choose to report it but not follow it. In conclusion, student behaviour problems are caused by the wide use of the internet in many ways, and I am sure that educating
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 with the right concepts through educational campaigns
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 the most efficient means to solve the problem.
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