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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people's life. Others think that adult life brings more happiness despite greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that the teenage
years
 are the most lovely time in some
people
's minds,
while
 it is a commonly held belief that teens are happier than the oldest
people
, there Is an argument that
adults
' happiness is huge compared to the teenage
years
,
this
 essay will analyse
this
 topic from both points of views, and express my opinion.
To begin
 with, we
shall
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 not lose sight of the fact that the teenage days have always been a remarkable period in most
people
's lives,
in other words
, we could say that in the time when we were young, we were more able to do various activities than what we can do as an
adults
people
, and
that is
 because old
people
 performance
as well as
 their productivity got decreased with the time running. Another point to consider
,
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 is that
adults
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adults'
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lives
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 might be way more
exited
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 than younger
people
's, it is
also
 possible to say that in most countries old
people
 have found different ways in order to make themselves happier,
in addition
,
according to
 a social study was published in the wall street journalist in
twenty – first
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 of October twenty hundred and nine, which was entitled "adult happiness", the study results concluded that
adults
 responsibilities making them more likely able to be enjoying the day than the teenagers. In conclusion, despite
people
 having different views, I tend to consider that teenage
years
 have always been an essential part of my memories, and
that is
 what makes it more happier than the adult
years
 in my opinion.
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