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The charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married in one particular country in 1996 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and repairing the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the ages of people when they got married in one particular country in 1996 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and repairing the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The presented bar graphs compare the
marriage
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 ages of both sexes in a country between 1996 and 2008.
Overall
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,
while
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 the proportion of women aged 25 to 29 maintained its dominant status throughout the period, the general
marriage
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age
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 for men remarkably increased. Regarding the ages of female
marriage
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, the
percentage
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 of the 16-19
age
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 group shrunk drastically from approximately 1% to virtually 0%, which is the lowest out of all
age
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 categories.
Similarly
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, the
percentage
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 of the 20-24 and 35-39
age
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 groups declined roughly by half, from 6% to 3% and 4% to just over 2%, respectively.
In contrast
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, that of 30 to 34-year-old women witnessed a subtle increase of around 1%, and the rise in the
percentage
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 of the 40-44
age
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 group was negligible. Concerning male
marriage
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age
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, the proportion of 20-24 and 25-29
age
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 groups slightly decreased, constituting 2% and 8% in 2018 respectively. Over time, marriages predominantly occurred in older
age
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 groups as the
percentage
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 of men aged 30 to 34 and 35 to 39 both soared by over 1%. Noticeably, 16 to 19-year-old men in
this
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 country did not get married throughout the entire period.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words marriage, age, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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