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What are the advantages and disadvantages of leaving your country to live or study abroad?

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In the fast-paced
worl
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world
, some
people
 are choosing foreign countries to get a higher education or live
.
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 Despite many advantages
such
 as getting a good education or changing scenery, there are some disadvantages like lack of money and missing home. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks
of
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to
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 being far away from home. Men
that
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who
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 have visited
the
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foreign states may suffer from having
a
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little money.
This
 may
also
 lead to an increase in poverty in many cities. The reason is finding a job might be difficult if visitors don't know how to speak the language of the country they are in.
Also
, feeling missing home can be challenging, and it affects
people
's psychology.
On the other hand
, leaving the country to improve your lifestyle can benefit
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 some way. Many residents of the country would prefer to go abroad in order to get into top universities in the world because of the high quality of education. Other profits are seeing the new places and learning culture among the foreigners. These opportunities cannot only broaden
knowledge
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 of
people
 but
also
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the horizon
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.
To sum up
, despite the problems, the benefits of being abroad have many
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 on humans.
People
 should overcome all difficulties, because, everyone is born to create their ideal world.
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