The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040.
The line graph provides information in percentage units about the
citizens
which were located in cities of four Asian countries
during fifty years time period started
from 1970. Change the form of the verb
starting
Also
, it shows the possible future data for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
, it’s noticeable the most significant increases up to 2020 were observed in two countries
: Malaysia and Indonesia. On the other hand
, the most minor changes were applied to Philippines
and Thailand. Correct article usage
the Philippines
However
, the prediction for the citizens
of all mentioned countries
has the same upward trend between them.
The Malaysian population
had a gradual increase during 20 years period started
from 1970 (Wrong verb form
starting
it’s
increased from 30 Unnecessary verb
it
percent
to 45 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
). Afterwards, the information shows that the Change the spelling
per cent
quantity
of Malaysian Change the quantifier
number
citizens
rose rapidly from 45 percent
of Change the spelling
per cent
all
Correct determiner usage
the
population
to 75 percent
during 30 years from the previous jump. Change the spelling
per cent
Furthermore
, there was a sharply
climb in Change the word
sharp
Correct article usage
the numbers
numbers
of Indonesian residents from 15 Fix the agreement mistake
number
percent
to 55 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
approximately during Change the spelling
per cent
all
the period until 2020.
The minor changes can be reviewed Correct determiner usage
apply
in
a group of Thailand Change preposition
by
citizens
. There were
a Change the verb form
was
slightly
climb from 18 Change the adverb
slight
percent
to around 31 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
up to 2020. The same situation can be observed in Change the spelling
per cent
Philippines
where the quantity of Correct article usage
the Philippines
population
went up moderately from around 32 percent
to 46 Change the spelling
per cent
percent
approximately until 2020. The predictions have an upward trend with Change the spelling
per cent
Correct article usage
a significantly
significantly
increase which spreads out to all four mentioned Change the adverb
significant
countries
. In this
case, the population
will increase by 20% for each country from 2020 to 2040.Submitted by fedorusa2016 on
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