The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in there different countries.

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The line graph illustrates the percentage of the population aged 65 years and plus in the USA, Sweden and

Japan

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over the period of 1940 to 2040.

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, the graph depicts an increase in population for all the countries despite some fluctuations of data in between. In 1940, the USA had the highest number of elderly residents at around 9%

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Japan

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had the lowest at 5%. For the USA, the numbers kept increasing to 10% in 1960

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jumped to 15% in 1980.

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it started to fall below 15% in 2020;

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, it has been rising since

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and is expected to reach 23% by 2040.

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Sweden was lower than the US

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at 14% in 1980, it sharply rose to 20% in 2010 and is expected to overtake the US and peak at 25% by 2040.

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remained lower than the rest consistently from 1940 to 2000 at around 5%.

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, its data is expected to double to 10% from 5% by 2030.

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Japan

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is to witness a massive spike of an estimated 27% with the highest number of aged people than others by 2040.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in there different countries.

Today, more and more people want things instantly (e.g: goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it a positive or negatibe development?

ou are looking for a part-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: - introduce yourself - explain what sort of job you would like - say what experience and skills you have

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