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Some people say that government should increase the tax on petrol in order to decrease traffic and pollution. Do you agree with this opinion?

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The advancement of modern
metropolis
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 is often accompanied by increasing issues
such
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 as traffic jams and air
pollution
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. To deal with these concerns, many people come up with the suggestion that
government
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 should increase
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petrol
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the petrol
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tax
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. I am inclined to stand with the opponents.
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 with, traffic issue is undoubtedly a prevalent problem faced by various
urben
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urban
centers
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 worldwide. Citizens decide to own a car
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 the
inconvinence
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inconvenience
 of public transportation or simply because it does not impose a significant financial burden.
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 increasing
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petrol
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the petrol
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tax
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 seems like a direct solution, I believe that
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 may give rise to other concerns. Life in the city is already stressful with
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 amount of pressure given by work and family. People struggle to meet both ends because of the high expenditure
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 basic necessities. Increasing
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petrol
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the petrol
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tax
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,
therefore
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, is certainly an extra burden for the general public. Global warming,
on the other hand
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, is another pressing issue, and it is remarkably contributed by exhaust emissions from metropolitan areas.
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, many governments have
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 considered increasing taxes on
petrol
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 with
hope
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to reduce
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of reducing
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gas
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the gas
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 requirement.
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this
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 might lead to a positive outcome in terms of improving air
pollution
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concern
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, I personally believe that there are better approaches.
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, the government can encourage the use of electric vehicles by reducing taxes
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its
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 ownership. They can
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 promote the use of public transport by lowering the price. These strategies may not only address air
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,
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 but
also
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 benefit the general public. In conclusion,
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petrol
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the petrol
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tax
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 might be considered
as
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apply
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the easiest approach, I believe that encouraging the use of green energy and public transport are better
solutions
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solution
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 to traffic and
pollution
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 problems.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • government intervention
  • taxation policies
  • reduce traffic congestion
  • incentivize
  • public transportation
  • carpooling
  • alternative transportation options
  • infrastructure
  • fuel-efficient vehicles
  • air pollution
  • implementation
  • low-income
  • individuals
  • families
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