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The internet allows us to stay connected with each other no matter where we are. On the other hand, it also isolates us and encourages people not to socialise. To what extent do you agree or disagree with these statements? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

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while
 back it was difficult to stay in touch with loved ones,
this
 changed over a decade ago, thanks to technology which is continuously changing for the better. Nowadays we are always connected with one another because of
Internet
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,
however
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 there are
also
 some problems that
comes
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 with it ,
this
 essay will explain how
Internet
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 impacted our life To a larger extent, I strongly agree that
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internet
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 made life easier, we are always in touch with family and friends .
Although
 we might be living in different countries, we can still communicate for less. Video calling was another great invention. Residing outside
country
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 of birth can be stressful but
facetime
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 can make it better
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 before smartphones communication was expensive,
people
 were using landlines and emails, some had to wait until they
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 to work to read and respond to emails,so it was slow There is
also
 a use of social media platforms
such
 as,
facebook
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instagram
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,ticktock etc which helps
people
 to look for their childhood friends,just by remembering someone's name you can look for them even if you have not seen them in
20years
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20 years
Although
 the
above mentioned
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 explains how
good
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internet
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 helped us
on the other hand
 it makes
people
 antisocial. Family
time
 is no longer special as it was long back,
people
tends
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 to
spent
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 most of their
time
 on their phones .Bonding
time
 is less
To conclude
, I agree
internet
 allows us to stay connected despite the distance,
although
 it is affecting family
time
. Rules should be put in place to balance the two
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