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Air craft have been increasingly used to transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it Discuss both views and give your opinion

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Many people
said
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 the increasing use of
aircraft
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 to transport fruits and vegetables to
countries
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where
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that
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 has
the
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hard condition to grow, most of the
countries
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 are out of
season
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such
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Africa
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as Africa
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, which is a good opinion, other think it is contrast. On the one hand,
advantages
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the advantages
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 of air transport have
statement
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a statement
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 that it offers many benefits.
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, it helps
consumer
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consumers
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, enjoy
wider
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a wider
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 variety of fresh
product
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products
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 throughout the years.
This
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 thing leads
a
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to a
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more balanced and
nutrition
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 diet.
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, air transportation can help
economy
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the economy
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 develop
countries
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increasing
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by providing them with
active
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an active
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 export market for their cultural produce.
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, it can help to ensure the different
of
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the
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kinds of
production
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 in the other
season
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. On the other
hands
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,plane
aircraft
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has
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 a negative impact
to
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environment
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the environment
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. The carbon emission, and associated with transporting deliver fruit and the contrast
season
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production
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 from the other country.
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, climate change
also
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effects
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on
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apply
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the
production
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such
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 as
amount
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the amount
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 and qualification of fruit in that area
according to
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 the
season
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.
According to
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 my opinion,
aircraft
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helps
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 a lot of advantages for the consumption of
production
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. It enables the economy
develop
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 dramatically
as well as
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 the friendship between the
countries
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 is more and more better. In conclusion,
aircraft
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 is one the best way
help
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to help
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economy
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the economy
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 develop and
the
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people’s life is
further
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 wealth.
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, we should keep the environment clean for good life
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Be sure to clearly introduce and conclude your essay. Provide a clear thesis statement in your introduction that previews the main points you will discuss, and summarize your main points in your conclusion.
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Provide clear and comprehensive arguments for both views. Make sure to clearly state the advantages and disadvantages of using aircraft to transport fruit and vegetables, and support each point with specific examples.
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Work on your sentence structure and grammar to improve clarity. Pay attention to subject-verb agreement, word order, and use of punctuation.
language
Expand your vocabulary and use more varied and appropriate language. Avoid repetitive use of words and phrases.

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