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Aircraft have been increasingly used transport fruit and vegetables to some countries where such plants hardly grow or are out of season. Some people consider it a good idea, but some people oppose it. Discuss both view and give your own opinion.

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 interested in the idea
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 using aircraft to carry fruit and vegetables
to
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oversea
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 or some places can not
plant
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,
while
 some people think it is not a great idea. On the one hand,
air
transport
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 that it offers many benefits.
Firstly
, it enables consumers to enjoy
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 variety of fresh produce
through
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 the year.
This
 can lead to more balanced and nutritious yet.
Moreover
, our
transport
 can boost the economies of developing countries by providing them with an export market for their produce.
On the other hand
, critics of
air
transport
 point to its negative environmental impact. The carbon emissions by
air
 can contribute to climate change.
Furthermore
, opponents argue that
air
transport
 can make fresh produce more expensive for customers. In my opinion, the decision of whether or not to
transport
 fruit and vegetables by
air
 is a complex one that must be made on a case-by-case basis.
While
air
transport
 can offer certain advantages, it is important to be mindful of its environmental impact and the potential for it to increase food prices. In conclusion, the goal should be to strike a balance between ensuring access to fresh produce for all and protecting the environment.
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